Every Wednesday, Rochelle gives us another Friday Fictioneers, where using a photo prompt, we write flash fiction – a short story of around 100 words. If you want to have a go, scoot over to her blog and take a look at the full rules.
I have been writing an ongoing story which a lot of people know of. It is a two-sided story that I write with Jules Paige. Raynard and his cronies versus Saskia and her blood sacks. My side is from Raynard. If you want to read the entire story from the beginning, you can find it at the top of the page under FICTION –> Friday Fictioneers. Jules side of this weeks fiction can be found here (link to be added)
© Copyright – E.A. Wicklund
AMBUSH
Tess heard the commotion as she made her way to Raynard. Rounding the corner, she spotted two men attacking him with knives and stakes. She wanted to stand back and watch, but compulsion bade her aid him. Hearing Raynard’s suggestions in her mind, Tess ran forward and leapt thirty feet in the air, landing on one of the assailants with her extended nails slicing through his spinal cord.
Raynard’s left arm hung limply at his side with smoke erupting from his shoulder. It did not stop him finishing the other assailant though. Tess pulled the stake out of his shoulder, her hands burning, as Raynard let out a fearsome howl.
ADDITIONAL:
As I didn’t have the words to describe everything, one of the dead bodies had an accurate sketch of Raynard with the name “Pale Gulliver” and the reason the stakes burned and steamed, was because they had been soaked in Holy Water
A Mixed Bag 
I’m not going to read this entry. I’m going to copy & paste then read from beginning to end.
Cool 🙂
I guess in the spirit of gamesmanship it is OK for Raynard to have some helpers – just keep the zombie army out of it will you! *giggle* I still think even with the vast network of ‘Sanctuary’ that the vampires have more ‘power’.
Just got to posting my side…
Two vampires are almost unstoppable. They have the disadvantage of not being able to fight in daylight though
Only a slight advantage? I do need some recourse, well besides magic of other sorts!!! 😉
Haha yeah there is that as well. lol
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Loved the shared passion for a wild and wooly story… makes mine seem so sedate. 😉
Your one is cool. I liked your use of the birds
Thanks. That’s kind of you. Half the fun of FF is seeing the different approaches. Case in point, here. 🙂
It is. My one is easier because of the ongoing story
I think it’s that much more of a challenge to keep the story going with unknown prompts coming your way. Really cool!
That can throw a spanner in the works sometimes
oh the action!
Thank you kz. It’s always difficult trying to get that much action into 100 words
Wow! She has extreme jumping abilities! And the name: Pale Gulliver is great..I am worried about Raynard now, though. He definitely needs use of that arm.
If you’ve been following Jules’ side as well, you will see that Saskia’s posse call him Pale Gulliver. Don’t worry, there is plenty of blood there for him to heal 🙂
Good action! So Raynard prevails to live another day… I wonder if he would’ve fought off the assailants without the aid of Tess. But no need, though, since he has an effective helper in her.
Thank you. There was more description in the fight, but I had to reduce the wording
Alastair, I sincerely hope that you and Jules will seek to publish this serial into a novel. What I’ve read of it so far is thoroughly intriguing!
Thank you Alejandro. That means a lot
Quite the compliment – Thank you Alejandro!
Great, Al. I should have realised it my last comment – of course from YOU is where your son gets his writing talent! 🙂
By the way, I love your new fresh look.
He’s not my son, he’s my nephew 🙂 Thank you Noleen
Ugh! How did I get that wrong? Guess I was just expecting it… Sorry.
It’s okay, I think most people only write things like that about their own children.
Dare I say I’d love to see you take a week now and then to write some non-Reynard FF stories? It’s been a very long time and I’d love to read some again. My ancient brain has trouble sustaining the story line for so many months. 🙂
janet
I’ll see what I can do next week 🙂
An action packed scene!
Thank you Rosy. Not often a vampire can be ambushed. Plus it showed that Tess has no choice but to help Raynard
I nominated you!
http://cupandchaucer.wordpress.com/2013/10/02/another-award/
I appreciate it Udita, but I can’t accept awards any more. I don’t have the time unfortunately.
Thank you for thinking of me though
Oh yeah, I know that. That’s fine 🙂
you matched the photo really well with the story!! good job!
Thanks Terry. I didn’t want to refer to it as a simile, so I felt just walking in on the fight with her unable to resist would be the best way to do it.
you made the right choice!
Thank you 🙂
Wow. That’s intense. What a great fight scene. I love all the details of this one.
Thank you. Your photo certainly brought out the scrap in it. At one point I had to bring it down from 177 words. It was a lot scrappier with more description in the deaths, plus Raynard’s recovery.
That is a very cool photo by the way.
I know the feeling. I have to cut the word count down every time. It’s more difficult writing *only* 100 words than many realize.
Glad you liked the photo. Sherry and I took hundreds of pics (continuous shooting mode) of this one seagull and his many battles.
Fantastic. Top boss of the bird world then. Well, you know what I’m like for seagulls anyway hehe.
It was one of the reasons I raised mine from 150 to 200 which is just a rough one as some go as high as 400. The stories need it though. With a continuing one, you can remove words as you can add them the following week.
Yeah, I for one am happy you expanded it. I can stretch my legs a little.
I did think about going higher, but was advised against it. Going higher would have invited even higher word counts. Like 500 words would have gone to 600-700 etc.
That makes sense. Still, I think it’s good exercise to keep tight constraints. I enjoy it, even if difficult, because it teaches me to keep my writing lean.
Yes, I found that. Stop over using descriptives.