The flowers withered and the petals fell
The land dried and the stems became brittle
The roots cried for water
The heat laughed at them
Continuing it’s drought
Suddenly, a drop
The heat furied
Evaporated the rain
The rain screamed through
Defying the heat
The flowers looked up, close to death
Thinking it a mirage
Thinking it were not possible
The rain settled on the stems
Mingling with tears of joy
….
Sometimes you have to open your heart
before you open your eyes
Β© Alastair Forbes 2012
A Mixed Bag 
so beautiful… Thank you dear Mondrak, love, nia
This is awesome. Terrifying but awesome. I love the image of “heat furied”
Thank you for your great feedback π
Rosy stole my comments!! π I love that line as well. And I love this poem. Such great work!!
Thank you Rachel π
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Thank you. Thank you, so very much π
wow… this is VERY good Mondrak. I am SO glad you are sharing writing.
The rain screamed through
Defying the heat– loved this line!
Thank you -A-
keep going π
This One Is Really Deep
Thanks Maddeline
Hmmmm. So you want the truth here! Are you sure? Sorry can’t help myself – Seriously though – in a word – Brilliant! We can discuss the individual merits if you like Mondrak, but sincerely, all the parts and pieces flow (your expressive words and imagery, it is a beautiful piece of artistry, I like it a lot. Oh that reminds me, You do plan to enter my challenge, right? π
Already done it π
And thank you for your feedback π I was more worried about this one as it is a different style from what I have done before.
I know that’s whats so really cool about it, I see the change, no not the right word, expansion, I see the expansion and exploration of how you’re viewing your thoughts and ideas….:)
My daughter isn’t keen as “it doesn’t rhyme” lol
I value your opinions highly, so I am really grateful. Also contemplating removing the “Mondrak” and using my name instead. π (Although my middle name will never see the light of day lol)
Well for her rhyming is a great way to start, so I get that. Good on – re: your name, but now I am curious about your middle name? π
Haha The advantage is, is that it is an extremely uncommon name so no one will guess it. π
Hmmm, okay then…:)
π Think I’ll do that over the next week. I’ll do it when I change the other bits – providing I can get them to work hehe
Good luck, looking forward to further developments of evolution! I am being serious here by the way, Mondrak, Penny
Thanks Penny. I do believe I am coming out into the light. And although it is slow tentative steps, there are some things that are showing me that there is a reason to be happy. This happiness, I think, is drawing these words straight out of me and giving me inspiration I never knew existed.
You do know that you are your own reason for happiness, then add all the other things that are in your life – it becomes exponential my friend! π
Only just caught this. I was just shutting everything do go to bed.
Thank you. We are all our own reasons, it just takes someone or something to show us. To point us in the right direction and that can make all the difference.
π
Lovely poem Mondrak!
“Sometimes you have to open your heart
before you open your eyes”
So true.
Thanks Rosy π
Wow……
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