This poem started to form when I read Penny‘s poem If I Didn’t Care. It is a two stage poem, one part rhyming, and the other not. I’ve been working on it for a while now. I’m still unsure about it.
Through the freezing snows of Winter
That tries to find new ways to hinder
Through the new life brought out in the Spring
That warmth and joy to our hearts does bring
Through the soaring heat of the Summer
Happiness wrought to those who are glummer
Through the fading light and life of Fall
That falling leaves hints at the end of all
Love tries to find its way
Looks into our hearts, our minds
Tries to see who is worthy
Looks to see who needs it most
Lust attempts a coup
Forcing the mind’s hand
Trying to usurp the power of love
Pretending to be one while hiding the other
The heart tries to tell the difference
With the mind shouting out in alarm
Will the heart see sense and win through?
Will the mind give in and not even care?
© Alastair Forbes 2012
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Just…absolutely….beautiful! You are letting your talent shine so very bright!! This is fantastic! So well-written….I really truly love this!! Most excellently done sweet friend! Please keep writing….please? 😉 Hugs ~
Thank you 🙂 I had so much trouble with the first part. Especially with something that rhymed with Summer. I regretted pressing publish as I thought it still needed work.
My daughter wrote a poem last year, and it was published in a book that is available to schools and shops across the country. So proud of her. She has just wrote a song for her Granddad as well. Not my dad, her mum’s step dad
Heart renderingly beautiful Mondrak. Worry no more. You are a wonderful human being. You are loving and caring and gifted in such a special way. Please share more of your love and talent with us. You light up our lives with your words and photographs, you are needed, wanted, and loved, Penny
Thank you Penny, that means a lot to hear (read?) you say that 🙂
You’re very welcome. My most sincere pleasure Mondrak. Interesting thing about words regarding being spoken or written, if you understand a little about the author of the written word you do “get” the nuances that are meant as if the words were being spoken, I think! 🙂
I know exactly what you mean. You read what some people have written and they are words spoken in your head, but some people, you read them, and it’s words written in your head. As you say, it’s how the words are put down that can make all the difference
Agreed, also knowing the author (just a little tiny bit ) helps also sometimes. 🙂
Yes it does 🙂
🙂
This is so well written and touching. I can tell you put a lot of thought into it. Absolutely love it.
Through the fading light and life of Fall
That falling leaves hints at the end of all
– that line above has a real personal resonance with me. Beautiful line!!
Thanks!
xo
Rachel
Thank you so much Rachel. I was really worried about this one.